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Certainly looks better IMHO. Only thing is the propellers which in my eyes are a little too big (and I can be mistaken here of course, having drawn some liners doesn't make one an expert )

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Thanks and also i have ocean liner to show everyone, this is my first drawing for a AU i'm making.

may i present to you KMS Samidare the kantai islands first ocean liner.

Ordered: 19 December 1899
Laid down: 14 May 1900
Launched: 12 April 1904
Christened: 3 June 1906
Out of service:10 July 1956 (retired)
Status: museum ship

Type: Ocean liner
Tonnage: 16,892 grt
Length: 558 ft (170 m)
Beam: 64 ft 6 in (19.66 m)
Height: 38 ft 7 in (11.58 m)
Decks: 6
Propulsion: 2x toumaci Engineering Co.triple-expansion steam engines
Speed 19.5 kn
Capacity:1,500 1st-class: 200 2nd-class: 300 3rd-class: 1000

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Very nice work!

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Nice work, however that propeller is a bad representation of a much newer one

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hi everybody to day i have something special i'm binge working on, the kantai islands first four funnel liner, the Natsugumo was the kantai islands first four funnel ocean liner and the second class of ocean liner in the world to have four funnels.

Ordered: 29 December 1900
Laid down: 9 April 1901
Launched: 19 may 1905
Christened: 3 June 1906
Out of service:10 July 1960 (retired)
Status: museum ship

Type: Ocean liner
Tonnage: 17,982 grt
Length: 655 ft (200 m)
Beam: 65 ft 9.6 in (20.056 m)
Height: 60 ft 5 in (8.51 m)
Decks: 5
Propulsion: 2x Heguri Engineering Co.triple-expansion steam engines
Speed 22. 5 kn
Capacity:2,000 1st-class: 200 2nd-class: 800 3rd-class: 1000

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I kinda like how she looks as sleek as a warship. I do get the feeling, however, that she actually lacks some hull depth given her size.
On the aesthetical point of view I would open up the promenade deck towards the stern like it is at midship and leave the windows only on the forward third.
Finally, one last observation: Is the "Height: 27 ft 11 in (8.51 m) " figure intended to be the height of the boat deck above the waterline or the draft of the hull below the waterline? Because in the first case, on the drawing itself, it is 6 pixels higher, in the second case it is 10 pixels too shallow. (increasing the latter would mostly solve the "too thin" feeling about her)

Take it as a constructive criticism to improve your ship. for example the liner you have in the previous page looks really good.

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thanks, from the keel to The Boat Deck is 60 ft using pixel measured, i made the A Deck Promenade longer and made her hull deeper.

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I would take BB1987 advice on the promenade deck, and open it and leave only the forward part enclosed. On the other hand, if you like you can make all of the promenade deck closed, but it wouldn't be fitting with the era (early 1900's).
I would also make this ship a 4 propellers ship. It is more likely that a four funneled ship will have four propellers than two.

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To be completely fair we could get away with two propellers on a four-stacker -like the Kaiser Wilhelm- but they need to be a lot bigger (roughly 1.5 or 2 times than the ones currently there).

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Nice liner, however I think that she needs more draught. For props follow BB1987, he knows more than me.