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the girder on the stern does look comical, as I think the bars are oversized and it looks like an 'one piece frame' now because there are no edges. the hull looks a bit flat, add some shading or the underwater hull to fix that .
I see no reason to outline the white markings amidships in black, right now it looks like there are holes in the ship.
I would like to see the RHIB corrected, both boat and crane look off on your drawing
the forecastle looks a bit short, are you sure about it's sizes?
the satcom on the bridge, we have an updated drawing for it (the dog dish)

other then that, in my opinion it is looking pretty good!

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So happy someone's doing a RAN ship. Fellow Australian?

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Most important things are already pointed out by Acelanceloet. Of these, I'd say that the girder on the stern looks indeed most obviously "wrong".
That said, it's good that You're trying and You're willing to learn (and not starting with some AU vessel ).

Here it is with a few revisions. Its funny how you can be staring at something for so long yet still not pick up on some of the little things.

Fixed the frames, RHIB and the markings. In regards to shading, i cant seem to get it looking right at the front and isn't shading against the guidelines? The forecastle is accurate, just looks abit funny shipbucket style i guess.

As for the satcom i cant seem to find the updated version and i am not 100% sure that it is the right part to begin with. I have no real knowledge on the ships equipment, my time in the RAN was very short lived...

I sure am Australian Rodondo, haha i was checking out all the current aussie ships on here and as it was the only one not drawn so i figured i would join Shipbucket and give it a go.

Haha i wouldn't know where to start a AU vessel eswube, the only thing i have dared to attempt is to make hybrids of exsisting ships and give other real ships aussie paint schemes.

It would be nice to see the underwater hull! Good job BTW!

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Yes it is basically the last large current commissioned ship but there are hundreds more to be done for the RAN

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Seeing that we now 8.5 Australian (PB's a a uncertainty/honorary Aussie in my eyes for the great work he's done) its good to have another RL contributer

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How to mentally pronounce my usernameRow-(as in a boat)Don-(as in the short form of Donald)Dough-(bread)
"Loitering on the High Seas" (Named after the good ship Rodondo)
There's no such thing as "nothing left to draw" If you can down 10 pints and draw, you're doing alright by my standards

This is a very good first effort mate and good to see someone else is doing Australian vessels. Not a whole lot I can say as all of the relevant critical points have been made already. I look forward to seeing more of your work in future.

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