You're getting there but,... there appear to be a separationline between the deckhouse proper and bridge; very faint, but it'd add to the detailing. Also, your bridge windows seems to be of unequal width, whereas the hi-rez photo you supplied indicate equal width. Furthermore, you've omitted to show the tarp-covered railing behind the bridge, on the same deck level as your minute bridge wings, which, btw, according to the photo, needs to be longer, and substantially clearer than they are right now; and also, evidently covered by a tarp. As for the guns, the shield roof is straight, slanted down from the back. Yours are depicted as being rounded at the end. The barrels are way too thick; I'd suggest two pixels, one dark grey on top of a black line, to emulate the lighting, which is from above. Also, don't hesitate to look at other artist's solutions to such things as to how to properly (or believably!) depict an awning or a set of tarpaulins. You'll find troves of valuable info doing thus!
And, most importantly, I can spot, by looking at the photo, several missed opportunities to detail your otherwise very nice and grand vessel. I'll let you check that for yourself.
In fact, I think I can claim this for a vast majority of SB:ers: we hunker down around our photos and plans and spend an inordinate time scrutinizing every single detail, to explore what we can add, what we shouldn't, what we can't add etc. I can tell from your drawing above, that you too, have that innate capability!
_________________ My Avatar:Петр Алексеевич Безобразов (Petr Alekseevich Bezobrazov), Вице-адмирал , царская ВМФ России(1845-1906) - I sign my drawings as Ari Saarinen
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