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Post subject: Britannian first generation DreadnoughtsPosted: July 31st, 2012, 3:48 pm
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Here are the first generation dreadnoughts in the Imperial Britannian navy.

Dreadnought class.

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In Victorian colours.

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Westfallen class.

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I will be adding more later and will hopefully have them in different configurations.


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Post subject: Re: Britannian first generation DreadnoughtsPosted: July 31st, 2012, 4:03 pm
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To be fairly honest, they basic drawing is solid but it's bare on details. Certain details are a bit too thick; both of these combined give the drawing a bit more of a cartoonish look than it needs to be. The color scheme you've chosen isn't helping things either.

Compare those drawings to this (yes tooting my own horn again):

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But either way, look at what you can already do if you took all the time you spent worrying about AUs and put them into drawing (or, hell, I dunno, reading, or even watching TV or surfing the 'net) instead.


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Post subject: Re: Britannian first generation DreadnoughtsPosted: July 31st, 2012, 4:06 pm
APDAF wrote:
There are two things that bug me.

1) What are the ships called?
2) Can you replace the smaller guns on that Monster to something more American?

1) Why are the credits and names not properly placed and by proper font?
2) Could you add a more Britsh -or Germanic flag

Toché


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Post subject: Re: Britannian first generation DreadnoughtsPosted: July 31st, 2012, 4:07 pm
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You're getting better APDAF, and these drawings show it. Some things that should be considered:
~Funnels on the first 2 are far too small, make them bigger and only use 2.
~The 2nd mast on the first 3 is also pretty short. It should be taller.
~You need more details overall.
See Klag's example for how to fix these.

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Post subject: Re: Britannian first generation DreadnoughtsPosted: July 31st, 2012, 7:39 pm
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There is a reason why the masts are different heights because if one is hit then is does on obstruct the other on as much.


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Post subject: Re: Britannian first generation DreadnoughtsPosted: July 31st, 2012, 8:27 pm
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APDAF wrote:
There is a reason why the masts are different heights because if one is hit then is does on obstruct the other on as much.
I don't even know what the hell that is supposed to mean.


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Post subject: Re: Britannian first generation DreadnoughtsPosted: July 31st, 2012, 8:41 pm
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APDAF wrote:
There is a reason why the masts are different heights because if one is hit then is does on obstruct the other on as much.
If one is hit, then it's probably going over the side and subsequently sinking, so there's no reason it would obstruct the other mast. Real ships had equal height masts, so apparently this never was a problem.

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Post subject: Re: Britannian first generation DreadnoughtsPosted: August 1st, 2012, 10:09 am
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Are there any fatal design flaws?


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Post subject: Re: Britannian first generation DreadnoughtsPosted: August 1st, 2012, 11:34 am
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My personal oppinion is that the freeboard seems to be extremely high. The freeboard is usualy a bit less than the drought is deep. The armor belt is very high as well, especially for the time period. And, as mentioned, for "real" shipbucket you'll want to add details, such as doors, life rings, wiring(except what already is there. I suggest the IRL Dreadnought for inspiration.), and such.
Good luck. :)


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Post subject: Re: Britannian first generation DreadnoughtsPosted: August 1st, 2012, 11:54 am
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Is that better?


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