Lovely first drawing Jacky Tar, just few things to add (using
http://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/c ... HMCS55.jpg for reference)
I'd look at changing the port holes to 4x4 pixels, as they don't seem to be much larger than the ones on the door (certainly less than 6")
There is a change of angle on the bulwarks at the bow, up the top, would only be a pixel wide.
Jackstaff and Ensign Staff are absent as few features like lights/lamps, fire-hoses and other small bits and pieces especially around the center
Something I'd like to recommend as it does add a bit to any drawing, for those lines in the hull instead of just one darker line, try a lighter line with one underneath, that should help emphasize the shape of the lines
1) I'll give the portholes a try; I went the way I did at first because the 3 forwards ones are noticeably larger than the one in the forward door and I wanted to indicate that. I'll see what your suggestion looks like.
2) I did try indicating that with a slight change in the shipside grey; I guess I need a bit more contrast change. I'll try darkening that a bit.
3) How the flippin' hell did I miss both of those... also missed weatherdeck lights along the waist, too, I see now. I did put the two hose racks there, but they're partly occluded by the stbd rail (just by the midships bollards). There's also the kisby ring by the stbd bridge door... and the 12-in signal searchlight, as well as the whistle and upperdeck broadcast speaker... not sure I can actually place details as small as that; at 2 pixels/foot, they may be too small to show.
4) I'll definitely give that a try. I also need to move the strake along the waterline up a bit, too, I think.
Thank you very much for your feedback; I'll duff up the changes tomorrow when I get home. Also thanks for a wickedly excellent stbd side view, too; definitely bookmarking that!
ETA: Re the hose racks - I see I put them forward of the stbd classroom/mess door instead of aft where they should be... and I'll have to use pure white for the hoses; the light grey I chose doesn't show up worth a damn.
Also, next project will be HMCS Cormorant (ASL 20), decommissioned in 1997.