The problem is that you're drawing that can charitably be described as having dubious mission with conflicting requirements. This makes it really hard to give positive technical feedback, especially since we'd have to wade through the murky depths of the BBGN debate.
The drawing itself is basically sound from an artistic standpoint, but there's little point in going into the details when the overall design remains subject to change.
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