Why the unnecessarily massive superstructure? Only eats up valuable margins of stability as well as crucial tonnage. Also please note that on the forward wing turret base, one of the secondary casemate recesses is eating up volume needed for turret loading room and cartridge chamber. I'd consider redesigning that! Finally, your funnels are way, way too low, blowing hot fumes straight onto the SL-positions abaft the second funnel.
Otherwise a promising 'first'!
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